rebirthfrontier merge4

streamUniverse/debut.r3b1rth_frontier_mp4.fountain

@@ -3,6 +3,8 @@ Credit: Written by
 Author: RaincloudTheDragon
 Notes: Two Simons? There can't be two Simons!
 
+/*the idea here is that rainy from his origin universe, uploaded his consciousness to some sort of magic flashdrive which he ported over to another universe. he left this drive in a computer he placed (perhaps with help) in a single system with a direct line to the internet. from here, he could ultron himself into any location, backing himself up in several areas to make sure his efforts would be fine. he could hack into banks or however to get money so he could purchase the necessary equipment, shipped to a covert location (near the opening of this sewer system or whatever it is) and move it in to the headquarters. slowly, all the extra systems, drives, perhaps a single server rack with several large drives in raid 1 for long term, another with ssds for short term, probably several 3d printers, plywood scrapped from wherever (maybe there's a way to send the drones on missions to scavenge outside the system and far from hq) eventually all the resources would be found after ages and ages of building from nothing. probably would have exponential growth, startup is the toughest bit.*/
+
 /*could make this more similar to youtube-dl or some actual program or sum*/
 *We hear the close whirring of electronic devices off screen.* Text appears from the top left of a black screen:
 
@@ -15,7 +17,7 @@ ARTIFICIAL RAINCLOUD (V.O.)
 How long has it been? You think I'd remember what with how... neurotic this state has been.
 
 INT. WALK IN CLOSET #1#
-A dark walk in closet can be seen, from the top down. The shelves are full of computer devices daisy chained together with various peripherals, from eSATAs, USBs, and even IDE cables. One monitor, an Acer P236H, lays atop a mountain of chained devices.
+A dark walk in closet can be seen, from the top down. The shelves are full of computer devices daisy chained together with various peripherals, from eSATAs, USBs, and even IDE cables. A mixture of plywood planks, wooden doorstops, and 3d printed ramps populate the shelves; a convoy of 3d printed drones lay dormant on a charging rack. One monitor, an Acer P236H, lays atop a mountain of chained devices.
 
 ARTIFICIAL RAINCLOUD (V.O.)
 Regardless, for years my entire consciousness ran on a mess of outdated hardware. My frontal lobe was windows, my short term in linux, my long term on a couple pathetic hard drives in RAID.
@@ -28,8 +30,12 @@ You can imagine how... painstaking it was to build all this without a *real body
 
 We see an blue and white interface on the tank, resembling the LCD of a creality Ender series 3d printer. The silhouette of a creature and a heartbeat monitor are seen to the side of a loading bar. The heartbeat monitor reads '**15bpm**', the loading bar reads '**COPYING PSYCHE... STEP 1/3**'.
 
+/*
+this dialogue was changed because "my mechanicals" was too vague and the follow up of "our" would have made more sense in context of the drones, rather than a group of consciousnesses or just a hint at rainy plus darky, which i don't think i was going for.
+*/
+
 ARTIFICIAL RAINCLOUD (V.O.)
-My mechanicals were slow and dubious, but our work was as efficient as it could be. Once I did all the calculations, it was all but finished.
+Through a stolen hacked machine, I forged myself one step at a time. Couldn't have done it without my drones. My efforts were slow and dubious, but our work was as efficient as it could be. Once I did all the calculations, it was all but finished.
 
 We see just the base of the tank. The floor glows purple atop a waffle-style grid. The liquid is murky. Something out of our sight twitches from within, causing the liquid to be disturbed and tendrils of liquid create patterns.
 
@@ -60,4 +66,51 @@ RAINCLOUD pulls the oxygen and feeding apparatus from his face and allows it to
 RAINCLOUD
 How many birthdays have I got now? I believe this makes four.
 
-A rasterized date on a pixel grid; a close up of a monitor, appears centered on a black screen. 'debutStream{\u00A75_07.12.2022\}' "debutStream" is in red. The date is in purple.
+A rasterized date on a pixel grid; a close up of a monitor, appears centered on a black screen. 'debutStream{\#u00A75_underscore_07.12.2022\};' "debutStream" is in red. The date is in purple.
+
+/*luller "post credit scene" or perhaps a second trailer...*/
+
+Raincloud is staring at his reflection through one of the long the metal grates in the floor. His tail is swishing back and forth. We get an OTS of him admiring himself, then another shot from within the grate as though from his reflection.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Oh I did such a good job for a first try. These facial muscles are incredibly responsive.
+
+He squeezes and shakes the grate. It bends slightly. He rubs his hands together, he pokes them with his claws. Suddenly, he punches the ground, cracking the concrete.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+(to his reflection)
+Sensation! Pain! I didn't think I could forget... that!
+
+A *mechanical hand* suddenly pokes him in the side from the left, making him jump. A quick pan reveals it to be The Master Drone. Its apparatus makes a pointing sign the best it can with its claws.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Woah, you're supposed to be shut down! I've...
+
+The Master Drone extends its hand, indicating the other side of the room more intently. Raincloud realizes.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Oh, the mirror we salvaged. Wow, my first forgetting since having a body again.
+
+He turns and staggers toward the mirror. He's not so coordinated yet, and struggles to walk and talk to the camera atop the door simultaneously. This shot is mock-handheld OTS to simulate the shakiness of his movements.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Shut yourself down. I- you- we didn't want to play this game of who is the real one. It's been months, let yourself rest.
+
+Insert/"reaction" shot of the unmoving yet watching camera.
+
+He makes it to the mirror, resting his arms on either side of the walls and staring at himself. Beat, then he pushes himself away to spin and admire the rest of himself.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Yep, I'm very pretty. Very pretty ind-
+
+He stops, craning his neck to the view of himself from behind.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Why am I thick? That wasn't in the code!
+
+He dashes off to the closet, wobbling in his unsure walking pattern.
+
+RAINCLOUD
+Don't shut down, don't shut down! I need diagnosis!
+
+#END.